project_2501
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Post by project_2501 on Apr 24, 2008 11:09:44 GMT
ok this is bad. but i need posts  teej-poem.blogspot.com |
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project_2501
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"...I demand political asylum"
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Post by project_2501 on Apr 24, 2008 11:15:20 GMT
ok ok i know. double post but here. a taster: Two Faced Life’s enigma true meanings hidden
The masks people wear must be ridden
Protecting liars, strangers within
Stopping people seeing any deeper than the skin
We live life masked afraid to show feeling
Yet with every lie shed the mask is peeling
One day it will wear until nothing is left
Without these masks personalities bereft |
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Navarre
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So, The Beautiful World.
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Post by Navarre on Apr 24, 2008 17:11:17 GMT
It's good... I've never been a fan of rhyming couplets, but it's dark and prettiful.
Have you ever considered trying free verse?
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project_2501
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Post by project_2501 on Apr 24, 2008 23:04:53 GMT
considered it. but my brain wont let me  i am disfunctional i try and try. one day i will get it i hope thanks  |
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Navarre
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So, The Beautiful World.
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Post by Navarre on Apr 24, 2008 23:45:05 GMT
s'okay. as I sometime-ages-ago poet myself I suffer the same trials and tribulations  |
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project_2501
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Post by project_2501 on Apr 25, 2008 10:51:40 GMT
well i will just have to persivere(spelling?) |
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